My first Snippet for SFFS is from my eternally in-progress "A Fistful of Dragons". Here, the heroes have just joined a cattle drive and are about to meet some of the other cowhands.
Comments are welcome -- not just on the snippet but on the blog design, title, etc. If this blog becomes a going concern I hope to post more of my fantasy/SF as well as tell about "really cool things" I've read about (natural wonders and other stuff I think everyone should know about, hence "Look Around You").
Meanwhile, out on the trail:
Jon thought the three
men coming towards them were leading horses, but they weren't.
They had the dark
skin and features of Jon’s own people, long hair tied at the end with beads, and
wore wide-brimmed hats decorated with more beads and several feathers – tokens
of some brave deeds or big adventures. They wore buckskin shirts like the other
cowhands.
From the waist
down they were horses.
Jon, gaping, just
looked at Wolf.
“They’re called centaurs,” said Wolf.
“I know that!” Jon almost yelled. “But
they – well, where I come from you’d never see them on a cattle drive!”
“Why not? That’s more spare horses for the rest of us.”
Welcome, Shawn!
ReplyDeleteWhat a great snippet. I like Wolf's blase attitude about centaurs.
Looking forward to seeing more!
Sounds like Jon's from another world. Literally.
ReplyDeleteGood stuff!
ReplyDeleteLooking forward to more, and welcome to the SFFS crew!
Welcome to SFFsat!
ReplyDeleteNice snippet. I think I was just as shocked that they were centaurs!
Re: website design... I did have a bit of trouble reading the text since the background shows through quite a bit. But it's probably just me...
I'm reading on my phone and it's not an issue at all. Perhaps the mobile design is easier to read, though. As for your snippet: what an interesting world. I love that the shock for Jon is not that there are centaurs, but that they are on a cattle drives. Gives us a great understanding of the world. Welcome to SFFSAT. Looking forward to more.
ReplyDeleteI just love the chemistry in this piece
ReplyDeleteWelcome to SFFSat!! Love this, and the humour. Like JM said, I love that centaurs are a sort of everyday thing so it wasn't all that surprising. Looking forward to more.
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