SCI FI FANTASY SATURDAY JAN. 12: From Calamity Jane
This story has a few sci-fi elements, but the snippet has none. Brooke is a secretly the high-tech criminal called "Calamity Jane"; Edward is the newly elected head of local law enforcement. Naturally, they're strongly attracted to each other. This scene takes place at the "Teddy Bear Ball", a real high-society charity event in Los Angeles. (I attended it once, and I saw the two non-fictional people mentioned herein.)
“Enjoying yourself?” asked Edward.
“Are you kidding?” said Brooke. Champagne flute in hand, she waved vaguely
around the reception area. “Everything’s so beautiful!”
“I’m guessing this is your first society
function.”
“Is it that obvious? I think I saw Liza
Minelli back there!”
“Quite so, dear,” said a silver-haired matron suddenly appearing beside them. “No reality stars or celebutantes allowed,” she said mirthlessly. “How’s Edward treating you?”
“We’re just friends, Alice,” said Edward. “You
know, the governor’s over there and I’m sure he’d love to see you again.” Alice rolled her eyes and
glided away.
"And
who was that charming lady?" said Brooke.
"My
ex-wife's mother," said Edward. "Living proof that 'drama queen' is
an hereditary title."
I'm still working on bringing it in under 10 sentences.
Comments welcome. Oh, and how do I embed the SFFS logo and link here on my page?
Comments welcome. Oh, and how do I embed the SFFS logo and link here on my page?
No worries about not having sci fi elements, I picture everyone as aliens or androids anyway. My snippet is over on my website as usual. I have to stop forgetting to add my name to the list.
ReplyDeleteGood snippet.
ReplyDeleteDrama queen is a hereditary title - that was worth the price of admission alone. Cool Snippet - I enjoy the back and forth dialogue. Creates such a great pace for lines like the drama queen one. Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteMost of good SF looks normal in snippets. It's about the interaction of the characters.
ReplyDeleteEminently quotable Ms. Bowling nails it once again.
Delete"Living proof that 'drama queen' is an hereditary title."
ReplyDeleteLove love love this line. :) Great snippet!
Me too. It's an awesome line!
DeleteI'm with Sue. I think SF can be most effective when it feels completely familiar.
ReplyDeleteExcellent work. I chuckled.
ReplyDeleteAs for inserting the picture link, I will email you directions. (Cannot post html code in comments.)
Great little snippet!! I enjoyed this very much!!
ReplyDeleteHa, brilliant last line!
ReplyDeleteNice snippet. Background makes it hard to read, though.
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